Karin Mishima

[Tamaki Suoh]

I suggest you reread the templates, rules, and all the approved profiles; in current style it wouldn't pass as it is very brief and miniscule on details

Also, please modify your avatar. The image is fine, but resize it into the 150x300 size because there are times where the code won't automatically resize it and so the site gets distorted.

[raveflames]

I have read pretty much everything. Am I missing something? lol, what else do you want me to add?

[Whammy]

All right. Let's start this from the top.

1. Space out your paragraphs. You have to double-space on ProBoards, otherwise it comes up as one giant block of text. Very, very difficult.

2. There are size codes missing from the template, I believe. You're also missing the blockquote tags that are supposed to be in each section.

3. That picture... While yes it's a very well-drawn picture, I'm going to put this bluntly... She looks like a hooker. Not that it isn't a very well-drawn picture, but from my perspective, for the type of roleplay that Ouran itself is, the clothing she's dressed in is a bit too... Revealing.

Appearance

1. Where's her weight? You don't include that. "Mature" also doesn't tell much. I want to know her build as well, and actually describe it instead of giving it some sort of label-word [such as "average".]

2. You have absolutely little to no description of what she actually looks like. I get more description out of her hair than anything else. Describe the SORT OF STYLE of clothing she wears. For example, Haruhi wears a mixture of tomboyish and feminine, usually wearing comfortable short dresses with jeans and such, though there is the odd time she'll wear an actual dress.

3. That last sentence doesn't even fit in the appearance.

Personality

1. All right, so this personality... doesn't really tell me much. It does, but at the same time, it doesn't. The headings aren't necessary so please remove them.

2. Yeah, I know you've got the minimum, but that doesn't mean we can't still call you on what's there for content.

3. Go more into her self-pity and doubts about herself. You tell us she's full of doubt and self-pity, but how? Why doesn't she have many friends? How does she feel about her family leaving her behind? What stops her from using her skills? Does she want to show that she is able to live up to her family name?

4. Sweet and respectful. All right... does she always come off like this? What about her being quiet and shy? Why is she so introverted? Did that ever affect her ability to live up to her family name? Why does she lack self-confidence? Did something happen to cause that? Is there anything specific she's not confident about? I don't really think her family would just abandon her like that, really. Why does she choose to hide her feelings? Does she believe they make her seem weak, or what?

5. So she's the quiet kid with the funky hairstyle. Yeah, this smells like a Mary Sue to me. The fact that she's got an extremely extroverted style of dress and hairstyle coupled with the lack of description and the fact that she's EXTREMELY INTROVERTED is very, very, VERY Sue-like. It directly contradicts itself. Yeah, I understand she wants to be unique, but again... it's a complete contradiction.

History

1. Yeah, no. Sorry, but this isn't even a history. I see nothing about her life in general. I see a quick blirp-excerpt and learn absolutely nothing about her that I didn't already know from the history and personality thing.

2. I'm going to have to say no on the samurai/warlord thing. This is modern times, not feudal Japan.

3. The "all but one" stuff is... Again, very sue-like. I'm pretty sure she wasn't the only one that didn't like it, nor was she the only one who wasn't the best at it, either.

4. She doesn't even have the richy-rich background either that comes from being a student at Ouran. Really, most of the students at Ouran come from, as Tamaki puts it, filthy rich familities. I see no richy-rich family background here. I don't even see her life story, which is what the history itself is looking for.

I think that should be all. Overall, this application is in need of some major improvements, as it does not even come close to the standards set out in our rules.

[raveflames]

Alright then. Maybe one day I'll create another sheet. I won't use a picture on my profile then at all. I'll change everything soon, hopefully when I have the time.

[Whammy]

All right then. Since this topic is no longer necessary it's being archived. Thanks for being understanding and such. :3 [most people throw crazy fits and such, so, yeah.]