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Post by senshirou on Aug 22, 2011 6:44:03 GMT -6
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Post by Tamaki Suoh on Aug 22, 2011 18:19:41 GMT -6
Hello Sen and welcome to Maybe You're My Love. Anyway, character wise this is all good, but I do have one thing I'd like addressed. In the history you have this drama about his sister and how it shook the family 'to the core', but yet the personality doesn't seem to really reflect that outside of that one section about caring. I think you really should make that shape his personality more than you let on. Also, how exactly did it affect his family like you said it should. He seems to have been the only one affected by it.
Other than that, I think it's over all fine.
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Post by senshirou on Aug 22, 2011 19:46:20 GMT -6
I think that should do it. I was most likely going to develop it more IC since I had some ideas, but I hope that clarified it a little.
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Post by Tamaki Suoh on Aug 22, 2011 22:46:33 GMT -6
Approval
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