SHIMIZU, Friday autumn [COMPLETE]

[friday]

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Autumn

Keiko Shimizu::

Type: Original
Age: 16
Gender: Female
Sexuality: Straight
Crushes: Tamaki Suoh, Hikaru Hitachiin
Face Claim: Tohru Honda

Appearance: Autumn is a beautiful and adorable girl and has been told so by people ever since she was ten. She has brown eyes that are always shining and brimming with happiness. She stands at an adorable height of 5'3 and weighs around 115 pounds since she is pretty active. When in school, she can be seen wearing the female version of the Ouran uniform. When not in school, she is either wearing something she's comfortable in or jeans and a t-shirt.

Autumn wears only the most expensive designers from either Japan or other countries. Since moving to Japan, she filled her wardrobe with Hitachiin designs simply because she loved the way the designs looked and how they fit her. She also has DKNY, Donna Karan, Gucci, Coach, and Louis Vuitton. She is very big into the whole fashion scheme of things. She would never dream of wearing anything but those designers.

Personality: Autumn has a sweet personality and she is rarely seen without a smile lighting up her face. If anyone saw her without a smile, they'd know something was really wrong with her. She treats everyone with the same respect she'd expect to get from them. A couple of things has shaped her personality which are her love for the piano and dancing. Her parents wanted her to be creative in some way, so when she was five , they forced her into learning the piano. After a couple weeks, she excitedly told her parents she wanted to continue learning the piano until the summer before she would start her junior year in high school.

Autumn is intuitive, thoughtful, and insightful along with curious. She is thoughtful and cares for people's feelings and feels horrible hurting other people's feelings. She is curious about the world around her and about the people she will interact with at Ouran. She is pretty insightful because sometimes she can think of a design for someone on the spot. She is intuitive as well because she is knowledgable about certain things such as clothing designs, music, and dance.

Autumn has many different kinds of friends that she hangs out with. She is a social butterfly so to speak. She is a complete sweetheart around people and around her friends she is a little ball of energy always bubbling with energy and enthusiasm. She crushes on Tamaki because he makes her laugh and causes her to blush at times. She also crushes on Hikaru because he makes her laugh even more than Tamaki does and she thinks his pranks are funny and she wants to get to know the both of them better.

History: Akiyama Shimizu had been on a business trip with his fellow partners in the fashion industry in America. Los Angeles, California to be exact. Evelyn Carter, an up and coming fashion designer had quite literally bumped into him on the street. Akiyama thought she was the most beautiful woman he had ever met and seen in his entire life. The entire time he was in California, they saw each other every night. After a year of dating, he asked her to marry him and she happily agreed. Twelve months later, their little bundle of joy was born under the warm California sun. Akiyama and Evelyn decided on a beautiful name for her. They named her Autumn Keiko Shimizu, because she was born in the fall. They wanted her to have an American and Japanese name for her heritage.

Growing up, Autumn knew nothing but riches. Her parents didn't allow her to ever become a spoiled brat. They taught her how to treat everyone with respect and never treat them as if they were way below her. Ever since she took piano lessons, she's always smiled. She figured if she smiled at people, it would be contagious and they'd smile back at her. When she turned seven, she asked her parents if they could enroll her in dance classes. They agreed and she took ballet, jazz, and waltzing lessons. She loved every minute of her dance classes and still continues with ballet which always has her grinning like a fool.

When she was ten, her father was traveling home from work when a drunk driver hit him head on killing the both of them instantaneously. Evie and Autumn were very sad for a couple of weeks depending on no one but themselves. After their two weeks of mourning, Autumn returned to school and she hung out with her friends knowing age could always depend on them for anything. When she was fifteen, her mother was working in her boutique in town when she had a heart attack and died instantly. A neighbor went to check on her and called the police and the police contacted Autumn. Autumn immediately called her grandmother when she heard the news. Her grandmother told her to tell the maids to pack everything and move into her mansion in Japan the next week. Autumn decided to comply with her grandmother's wishes and move to her home in Japan.

She never knew her maternal grandparents due to the fact that they passed away when she was a baby due to natural causes. Her paternal grandfather had also died before she was even born. The only person still alive in her family was her paternal grandmother. She only took her in because she couldn't inherit the family business which was fashion until she turned eighteen. Her grandmother only adopted her because she found it convenient for her.

She only ever cared about things when it interested her. A few days after being in Japan, her grandmother took her to Ouran Academy to enroll her in the second year. While her grandmother and the dean talked, she explored the different floors of the academy. She was very excited, she couldn't wait to start there next week. She needed to brush up on her Japanese.

Controller's Information

Nickname: Courtney
Age: 20
Gender: Female
Seen the Anime?: Yes
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Sample RP: Autumn woke up that morning yawning as she sat up in her king sized bed. She pressed a button on her button which called for her maid who came in a couple seconds later smiling at her. "Would Mistress Autumn like to take a shower and then get dressed for school?" Autumn nodded and her maid turned on the shower to the temperature she liked it at. Autumn got out of her bed and walked into the bathroom and her maid walked out shutting the door and Autumn undressed and stepped in the shower sighing as the water hit her back.

She wet her hair and put shampoo in it and she scrubbed it gently into her scalp. She shaved her underarms and her legs while the shampoo sat in her hair. She rinsed out the shampoo a few seconds later making sure all of it was out of her hair. She put conditioner on the ends of her hair and she washed her body. She rinsed off her body and the conditioner out of her hair and turned the handles to the 'off' position and wrapped her hair up in a fluffy white towel and wrapped a fluffy yellow towel around her body.

She got dressed in her school uniform and slipped on knee high white socks and her school shoes on her feet. Her maid unwrapped her hair and dried it completely and straightened it to perfection. She then took a piece from either side of her head and braided it back loosely and tied it off with a yellow ribbon. Autumn thanked her as usual and grabbed her school bag and she went downstairs and out to her family's limo and got in. She was completely nervous seeing as she was a transfer student this year and most of the people here at Ouran had known each other since they were really young. She got out of the car and walked into the school and to her first class. She went through the day like everyone else and her last period was a study hall, so she decided to explore.

She eventually came upon Music Room #3 and she opened the door relieved to find no one in there. She set her bag down on one of the couches and she walked around ands saw a yellow n curtain which she pushed aside to find a grand piano. She smiled and sat down on a chair in front of it and started to play Fur Elise by Beethoven on the piano and she struck a chord that made a sour sounding note and she cried out in frustration "Why can't I get it right?!" She stood up and hid behind a pillar as other people came in the room.

[Whammy]

Hello Courtney and welcome to Maybe You're My Love?. Let's get this review going.

Appearance seems fine, though maybe a little more on clothing styles would be nice.

Personality...all that stuff about her piano lessons is really more history. When writing personality, think about what she thinks of the world, how she interacts with people, how she acts with her family, etc etc.

History is pretty barebones; flesh if out with some detail and interesting things. And it is kind of important if you state what the family businesses are; that can actually be an important plot point at Ouran. That, and how the parents meet.

Anyway, hopefully this will get you started on ideas and how to get your character moving. Let me know if you need anything.

[Whammy]

Okay, I'm going to have to say no to the mass murderer killing the mother. That's way too dark for the Ouran series.

Oh, and mind explaining how or why she has a crush on the twins and Tamaki? Maybe explain in her personality why she's drawn to people like them? You don't mention a lot about her views on friends, what kind of people she likes to be friends with, and how she acts with friends either. Try discussing that part of her personality a bit.

[friday]

FIXED!

[Aya-chan]

She stands at an adorable height of 5'3 and is slightly shorter than most of her Ouran classmates

Since the series does take place in Japan the average height for a Japanese female is about 5'2 which means she not shorter than most of her classmates.

The maids and she did what they were told and they moved into her grandmother's mansion the next week.

This sentence just doesn't sound right to me. I think it should be worded a bit differently maybe start the sentence with Autumn. For example, "Autumn decided to comply with her grandmother's wishes and move to her home in Japan." The maids are a given since she is rich after all.

You also have two events happening at the age of ten that is good, but how long after her asking to take dance did her father die?
Also since her father is Japanese did she ever visit her grandparents over in Japan? Wouldn't her mother's parents want to try and keep her over in America? I know I am picky about simply things, sorry about.

There two words that are link together in the profile by mistake that I saw.

Also, I get onto everyone about this, all numbers needs to be written out unless they are above hundred. 5 should be five, 10 should be ten, etc. The only number that is fine is the height. Please include weight.

[friday]

FIXED AGAIN!

[Aya-chan]

and shethinks his pranks

Need a space here and there one more number that needs to be written out in the history.

Also please space out the last paragraph in the History and everything should be fine.

[friday]

Fixed

[Whammy]

Approval